Will Hines

Chapter 4 - Editing The Scene

Table of Story Endings

totalgood	edit	endstory
0	"Blackout, mercifully."	"You leave the theatre with your head hung low. You can barely look up and when you do, that person you're attracted to is there, avoiding your gaze. You walk by Owen Burke and see in his notebook the words 'CUT' next to your name."
1	"Blackout, mercifully."	"You leave the theatre with your head hung low. You can barely look up and when you do, that person you're attracted to is there, avoiding your gaze. You walk by Owen Burke and see in his notebook the words 'CUT' next to your name."
2	"Blackout, mercifully."	"You leave the theatre with your head hung low. You can barely look up and when you do, that person you're attracted to is there, avoiding your gaze. You walk by Owen Burke and see in his notebook the words 'CUT' next to your name."
3	"Blackout."	"Ooof. That did NOT feel good. You are definitely going right home."
4	"Blackout. Mild applause."	"Not too great. But you tell yourself that you made some good moves and that it was just a weak audience tonight. Yeah, that's what happened."
5	"Blackout. Good applause."	"Good show. Was it? Yeah, it was."
6	"Blackout. Good applause."	"Good show. Some down points, but you guys brought it around, mostly. You walk out from notes with your head held high."
7	"Blackout. Big pop of applause."	"Great show. A few bumps, but it definitely hit hard. On your way to the back hallway for notes you see that person you're attracted to waving at you. "
8	"Blackout. Big pop of applause."	"Great show. Man it feels so easy when it works! You walk off stage and your team is all smiles. As you walk out, you're making jokes with people you've barely even talked to. That person you're attracted to gives you a half-hug. This was a good night."
9	"Blackout. Whoa! BIG applause!"	"Perfect show. You feel amazing. People are slapping you on the back and still laughing. Ian stops you on your way out and compliments the show. There's a thread about you on the IRC. Mullaney asks if you've ever thought about teaching. That night at McManus that person you're attracted to sits next to you and quotes your own jokes back to you. You go home and sleep serenely for the first time in your suddenly fulfilled life."

To say assessment:

let ki be the number of known used improv moves;

if ki is 0 or ki is 1 or ki is 2:

say "a terrible";

else if ki is 3 or ki is 4:

say "a pretty bad";

else if ki is 5 or ki is 6:

say "a good";

else if ki is 7 or ki is 8:

say "a great";

else:

say "a perfect".

Editing is an action applying to nothing.

Understand "edit" and "blackout" and "lights" as editing.

Check editing:

if player is not in Arena:

say "But you're not on stage!" instead;

If player is in Arena and StageLights are unscened:

say "You haven't even done a scene yet. Try to [b]INITIATE[/b]" instead;

Carry out editing:

let ki be the number of known used improv moves;

choose a row with totalgood of ki in the Table of Story Endings;

say "[edit entry]";

try noting;

say "[paragraph break][endstory entry]";

choose a row with totalgood of ki in the Table of Story Endings;

end the story finally saying "You had [assessment] show".

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